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Johnny Santamaria @johnny603

Payment Failed: Card Expired. Update Card Information.

Payment failed: card expired. Update card information to continue renting.

From:
DailyUXWriting
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Scenario: The user is trying to rent a car using an application but the credit card on file has expired.
Challenge: Write them an error message so that they can correct the problem.
Headline: 30 characters
Body: 45 characters
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Headline: Payment failed: card expired
Body: Update card information

Why I chose this:

Clarity: The headline immediately communicates the problem—“Payment failed: card expired” is direct and leaves no room for confusion
Action-Oriented: The “Update card information” body text provides a straightforward next step
Conciseness: Both the headline...